Post by Forsaken on Jun 8, 2004 3:52:47 GMT 8
This is the first time I've written anything in a long time, and I wanted the oppinions of someone who could actually write, excuse the the repititions of words if there are any, .
The rain continued its unrelenting cascade down towards the earth, a loathsome figure stumbled through the forest blindly, an unseen root causing him to fall, a small piece of gold fell forwards into the darkened mud, shining like a beacon its warm colour shining, the figure struggled to his knees, unsteady he crawled forwards searching for what he had lost, grasping it in his hand he looked at the ring, his face obscured by the darkness which consumed all light within its cold grasp, the sky glowed brightly for a second as lightning showed its face in the raging chaos, "Why", he murmoured slowly to the winds, a single tear rolled its way down his beaten face, dropping into a small puddle of mud making tiny ripples distort its surface, the figure scrambled to his legs, and continued moving, another tear dopping from his form, "Why....".... the thought repeating through his mind, he continued running... still the rain fell, soaking his mud ridden clothes with there icy touch, he shifted his eyes around... as if unsure of his bearings, and saw only darkness around him. He struggled onwards, the twisted trees where getting thinner, the deathly winds having corrupted there nature. A small lake lay in front of him, its clear depths polluted with soil, its tainted water moving slowing along its enebitable way, the figure dropped to is knees... purposely, and pulled out the ring, grasping it in his shivering hand, his tear-ridden eyes staring into its depths, "Why did you leave", the thought ripped through his mind tearing at his shattered heart, he stared into the murky waters, clear they where long ago, the memory... still as clear as it was that day... when he met her... the one he loved, his face melancholic, had a small smile, he remembered that day well, how they had come here together, the sky sky clear, sun beaming radiant across, the green horizon, puddles marking the ground, where sweet rain had fallen an hour before...
He returned to reality, the sky become desolate again, the trees horrific, and the clearing... a rotting miasma of torment, he looked at himself in the poisoned waters, a tear dropped, its ripples hidden beneath the torrent which assailed the area, he turned the ring over in his finger, staring into it, his face only stared back at him, the memories of his past tormenting it... He didnt want this pain... It drove a cold knife through him. how his soul yearned for her... a fire anger shined in his eyes... as he pulled something else from his pocket, its silver as bright as the gold ring in his fingers, he raised himself to his feet, and look down into the waters, "How I loved you", he murmoured, and then in the blink of his eye... he ended his pain.
The ring dropped from his hands spiralling into cold ground, where it lay... alone like the figure, lost in the chaos of the world... unloved...
2 drops of blood beside it...
The rain continued its unrelenting cascade down towards the earth, a loathsome figure stumbled through the forest blindly, an unseen root causing him to fall, a small piece of gold fell forwards into the darkened mud, shining like a beacon its warm colour shining, the figure struggled to his knees, unsteady he crawled forwards searching for what he had lost, grasping it in his hand he looked at the ring, his face obscured by the darkness which consumed all light within its cold grasp, the sky glowed brightly for a second as lightning showed its face in the raging chaos, "Why", he murmoured slowly to the winds, a single tear rolled its way down his beaten face, dropping into a small puddle of mud making tiny ripples distort its surface, the figure scrambled to his legs, and continued moving, another tear dopping from his form, "Why....".... the thought repeating through his mind, he continued running... still the rain fell, soaking his mud ridden clothes with there icy touch, he shifted his eyes around... as if unsure of his bearings, and saw only darkness around him. He struggled onwards, the twisted trees where getting thinner, the deathly winds having corrupted there nature. A small lake lay in front of him, its clear depths polluted with soil, its tainted water moving slowing along its enebitable way, the figure dropped to is knees... purposely, and pulled out the ring, grasping it in his shivering hand, his tear-ridden eyes staring into its depths, "Why did you leave", the thought ripped through his mind tearing at his shattered heart, he stared into the murky waters, clear they where long ago, the memory... still as clear as it was that day... when he met her... the one he loved, his face melancholic, had a small smile, he remembered that day well, how they had come here together, the sky sky clear, sun beaming radiant across, the green horizon, puddles marking the ground, where sweet rain had fallen an hour before...
He returned to reality, the sky become desolate again, the trees horrific, and the clearing... a rotting miasma of torment, he looked at himself in the poisoned waters, a tear dropped, its ripples hidden beneath the torrent which assailed the area, he turned the ring over in his finger, staring into it, his face only stared back at him, the memories of his past tormenting it... He didnt want this pain... It drove a cold knife through him. how his soul yearned for her... a fire anger shined in his eyes... as he pulled something else from his pocket, its silver as bright as the gold ring in his fingers, he raised himself to his feet, and look down into the waters, "How I loved you", he murmoured, and then in the blink of his eye... he ended his pain.
The ring dropped from his hands spiralling into cold ground, where it lay... alone like the figure, lost in the chaos of the world... unloved...
2 drops of blood beside it...